My last writing tip about sex (last week) brought me a lot of personal emails which surprised me. Normally, most of the communications is via the comments. Trust me, I enjoyed the private emails, too.
What I discovered was one basic theme You didn't show examples like you normally do.
Today's writing tip is going to show examples. You've been warned!
So, exactly how does one start a sex scene? Simple. Action.
John sauntered into the kitchen where Peggy was doing the dishes. He moved closer and when they touched, he wrapped his arms around her in an embrace, leaning in to nuzzle on the nape of her neck. He felt the heat of her body against him. She bent her head and enjoyed the moment, feeling his urge for more. Peggy turned to face him, placing her wet hands around his neck, kissing his lips and pushing herself against him, feeling him respond to her action. She smiled as her hand traveled down, caressing his chest muscles, continuing her path to his belt.
Notice that I have not truly described any real sexual encounter but yet I have subtly hinted John is aroused.
Sometimes the encounter can begin with fleeting looks and a casual touch.
Tim sat on the train, holding his book before him in an attempt to read. He was surprised when Larry sat across from him in the crowded nook of four seats, two seats facing each other. He'd met Larry a couple of days prior. Larry smiled then absently gazed out the window at the passing views. Tim looked up, Larry was gazing at him, then quickly looked away. Their knees touched on the sides. Once more Tim peeked over the book, Larry smiled and pressed his knee against Tim's. Tim didn't move, but smiled at Larry and gently pressed back. "I'm getting off at the next stop," Larry said, grabbing Tim's knee with his large hands. "Would you like to get a cup of coffee?" Tim didn't like coffee but he agreed and once more pressed against Larry's leg and knee.
There, now you know how to start a scene. The next step is to bring it to a true sexual encounter.
Jack lay in bed, the motel's thin sheet barely covering him and his obvious erection. Jill stood by the bed, her arms crossed before her, covering her ample breasts. "Let's take these off," Jack said and leaned over to grab the black strings holding the small, black lace bikini in place. He pulled and the fabric fell away revealing her beauty. "Get in here," he demanded, grabbed her hand and pulled her into the bed. It creaked under her slight body as Jack tossed the sheet away and rolled onto her.
As I stated last week, there is more to sex than just the feeling of the moment. There are sounds. There are smells, looks and tastes involved. Continuing on
Jack moaned as he moved into position and the bed springs creaked. Jill could feel his course hair against her sunburned legs. She flinched in pain. "You ain't no virgin. Hold still." Jill was startled by his crudeness and felt she was being treated like a tramp. She wasn't a whore this was only her third time and she thought Jack liked her. Jill heaved a sigh. Jack considered that satisfaction and slobbered a kiss, pushing his rough tongue into her mouth. Jill found the lingering taste of his cigarette offensive; she attempted to push him away. "That's right, baby. Move it," Jack grunted in syncopation to his movements. "I don't need to do all the work." Jill stared at the motel's water-stained ceiling, listening to Jack's heavy breathing and the bed's squeaking. Jack moved faster.
Now, each scenario above could be written with a much heavier-hand. For me, I am pushing the limit of my sexual writing prowess. I don't normally include anything as vivid as the above in MY writing.
In truth, write what you feel comfortable with. As I have stated before, unless you truly feel the story needs a sex romp, there is no reason to add one.
Who was it who said something like the most important part of being an artist (of any kind) is knowing when to stop? Great scenes, Bob!
It is a fine line between a sensual scene and sexual scene aka porn.
Very vivid scenes. I always feel that the play leading up to the sex is more interesting than all the grunts and groans. Thanks for the examples.
Perhaps you'd prefer to read my buddy's tip for writing "afterglow" which is very good. Tip #8
Eeek, I had to read them with my hands over my eyes - what the heck is wrong with me!? LOLOL! I firmly like your afterglow sex, the kind with the hints without the all out throbbing. Nice post.
I didn't think they were all THAT bad. LOL.